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A small mountain town is awakened from it's peaceful norm as a child's ghost leads Maria to uncover an unsolved murder that took place in the town at the turn of the 20th century.
SYNOPSIS:
Maria is forever taking pictures of old barns and homes across the North Carolina countryside. She is turning 40 in a few months and feels trapped in her current desk job. After being invited to a friend's life coaching event, she decides to start a documentary of old home sites and their history. Her hopes are to have the web series picked up by one of the major networks.
While Maria is gathering all the photos taken over the years, she stumbles on a photo taken in one of their favorite mountain towns. In looking at this photo, she sees an image she didn't remember seeing before. It is an image of a small girl in the upstairs' window. Because the photo was taken before the digital age, Maria took the negative to be enlarged. Upon receiving the photo back, the image is not there. She quickly goes back to her work table and picks up the 4 x 6 photo. The image of the girl is still there. A sudden rush of fear engulfs her. Although Maria does not believe in ghosts, she does believe angels and demons exist, but what message could this one be trying to convey?
Maria schedules time off of her day job to research the town's history. Although Maria's husband has finally become patient with her picture taking, he is a little leery of her documentary idea, but he acts agreeable for her sake.
During her week at the town, Maria digs out what seems to be a missing person report of a small child that lived in the home, however, upon visiting the home, the child leads her to other conclusions that awakens the town from its slumber and digs up things from the past certain town folk do not want revisited.
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Jessica, your logline sets up an intriguing supernatural mystery with a strong sense of place and a compelling hook. The idea of a ghostly child guiding someone to uncover a century-old murder immediately draws interest. To make the logline stronger, consider tightening the wording for clarity and impact. For example, replace “it’s” with the correct form “its,” and rephrase to bring Maria’s emotional stakes to the forefront. What drives her to follow the ghost’s lead? A touch more urgency or danger could elevate the suspense and deepen the connection to her character.