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Three vastly different, but eternally bonded sorority besties, a fiery feminist, a devoted Bible‑thumper, and a forever teen have been enjoying their life together as retired, husbandless, happy roommates when out of the blue, their long-lost fourth sorority sister, KAY pops up for “dinner” with a suitcase in hand. Large and in charge, Kay moves right in, turning her sisters lives upside down, and inside out with riotous chaos meant to prove they’d be lost without her! None have the courage to kick Kay out until she lands them all in jail for the night, forcing the original three to plot an escape from her well- intended clutches and give her the boot. This tale of sisterhood is The Golden Girls or Grace and Frankie gone full Reservation Dogs in the peaceful burbs of Durham, NC.
SYNOPSIS:
KAY CHILDS (58) has always lived life loud, large, and unapologetically, which is exactly how she gets herself evicted from Sunny Blooms Elder Care after too many money schemes, a moonshine speakeasy, an unauthorized resale shop, and flooding the community room twice to boot! Now homeless but unbothered, Kay has the good fortune of running into her long-lost college roommate and sorority sister Ruth, a sweet Bible -thumper with a heart big enough to forgive anyone. Ruth kindly invites Kay over for dinner to “catch up”, saving as a special surprise the fact that she now lives with their other two former sorority sisters, PORSHA, a cougar who dresses and talks like a teenager and SONYA, a sharp-tongued feminist and conspiracy theorist. Back in college, Kay, Ruth, Porsche, and Sonya were inseparable besties and the loudest crew on campus. Kay accepts the invite and then shows up for the “catch up” dinner with a stuffed suitcase and expectation that she can stay forever.
The Zen-like peace that Ruth, Porshe, and Sonya have built for retirement instantly explodes into pure comedic chaos and blows the house wide open. Old college dynamics snap right back into place, old rivalries, grudges, the roster of stolen boyfriends, accented with feminist rants and Bible verses, as well as a fresh wave of public shenanigans all overtake the once peaceful household. Kay breezes comfortably, but her friends were not prepared and having none of it. The trio desperately begins to plot how to get Kay OUT, while Kay becomes equally determined to prove not only that they still need her, but that their sisterhood isn’t; it just history, it’s DESTINY.
The more Kay settles in like she never left, the more these women are forced to navigate the hilarious chaos of rekindling a sisterhood that was always in shambles, always loud, and always theirs. The Stories is a warm, wild, laugh out loud comedy about four women rediscovering friendship, purpose, and the beautiful mess of aging with flourish, on one’s own terms
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Hello Mone't Weeks, the concept of your story is surely unique and amusing; however, the logline is a bit too long, more like a synopsis. Here's my suggestion: 'When a long-lost sorority sister unexpectedly pops up for “dinner,” three different but bonded sorority besties have their lives awfully disturbed, and now need to build the nerves to boot the sister before she gets them all into serious trouble.'
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I believe the current logline is exactly what my pitch deck needs. Over the years, I have collaborated with my screenwriting consultant who has extensive experience in the entertainment industry. With their guidance, the logline has been thoroughly reviewed and has received her approval.
Paying attention to the finer details is crucial. While the length of a logline is often considered, it is important not to focus solely on word count. Instead, the effectiveness and clarity of the logline should take priority.
It is essential for the logline to remain true to the genre, especially since this project is a Rom/Com. Maintaining the appropriate tone and style ensures the logline accurately represents the story and appeals to the target audience. Thanks for reading it.
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Okay, Mone't, that's great. I'm still learning about script writing, loglines, synopsis, etc. Your comments are most valuable. Thank you for taking the time to teach me.
You are welcome!
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