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MATHIAS
By Marc Babin
Trapped in a colorless routine, Mathias begins to see his reality crack: missed meetings, blurred memories, strange visions. Sent against his will to the Eastern Townships, he meets people who turn his ordinary life into a journey of awakening, where the line between the known and the unknown slowly fades.
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I get that you tried to sound mysterious, but I feel like the logline doesn't tell me what this story is about. What's the assignment? What's his journey? Why does the line blur? This could be a logline for 100 different stories.
Liron Vardi Thanks for the feedback! You’re absolutely right. Finding that sweet spot between too much info and too vague is an art in itself. Still experimenting to get it just right.
Marc Babin feel free to DM me if you need further assistance with tightening it.
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Really appreciate the feedback. I updated my logline with a version that feels much closer to what the show really is.