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THE BATTLE FOR LIFE
By Rohullah Mowahed
SYNOPSIS:
Prince of Darkness is the most immersive VR game ever created—a collaboration between an Afghan visionary and a Japanese tech genius. Twenty young players from around the globe are chosen to enter the simulation through high-tech capsules in Tokyo. But when they awaken in a vivid ancient world, older, stronger, and armed for battle, they realize the game is far more real than they imagined. After one of them is incinerated by a dragon in-game—and moments later, his charred body is ejected from the capsule in the real world—panic sets in. Their connection to the outside world is severed. Now trapped in a realm of warlords, injustice, and fire-breathing dragons, they must decipher glowing spiritual clues left behind by the mysterious game creator. As an ancient prophecy awakens the Prince of Darkness—a one-eyed, blue-lit warrior with a vendetta against humanity—the players must unite or perish. For Ali, Osman, Sara, Clara, and the mysterious girl Nora, this is more than survival… it’s the battle for life. #SciFiFantasy #VRHorror #EpicBattle #Dragon #GameOfThronesVibes
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Thank you so much, Nate, for your rating! I truly appreciate you taking the time to read my logline. Would love to hear any thoughts or feedback you may have. Grateful to be part of this creative community.
THE BATTLE FOR LIFE sounds unique and exciting, Rohullah Mowahed! I think your logline could be tightened up some, and I think the end is vague.
Here's a logline suggestion: After being trapped in a deadly VR game of dragons, tyrants, and ancient prophecies, twenty global players must follow hidden guides left by its mysterious Afghan creator to defeat a vengeful warrior and save humanity.
You're welcome, @Rohullah. Your logline is better, but I think it still needs some work. I'm not sure what "their struggle" means, and I'm not sure what "but survival demands more than weapons. It demands souls" means.
"Your suggested logline is fantastic for Season 1’s hook, but I want to avoid spoiling the long-game stakes." You want to spoil the long-game stakes in the logline. Don't hold back key things in the logline. It could make some producers pass on your project.
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Hi friends, I hope you're all doing well.
I've uploaded the new logline for The Battle for Life — the previous one didn’t fully introduce the world of the game.
I’d love for you to take a look and share your thoughts.
Also, I noticed that some of you might not be able to view the Synopsis,
so I’ll post it in the next comment to help you better understand the story details.
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Very interesting, a subtle mix of Ready Player One, Jumanji and Game of Thrones, I love it!
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Hope you're doing well too, Rohullah Mowahed. I think you're close to a solid logline. I suggest mentioning the protagonist in your new logline. And your logline doesn't mention the VR game.
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