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Ten years ago, a man had a dream he could never forget: he was flying just above the treetops of a vast, untouched jungle under a glowing orange sky, guided by a child-sized being in a radiant white cloak. They passed over native villages and endless green—no words, no faces—only the feeling of something ancient calling to him. He woke changed, and that dream lived vividly in his mind for a decade, like it had happened yesterday. Then, the being returned. His name is Xeligo, and he isn’t a dream. He appears in visions, in sleep, and in moments of silence. He teaches not with words, but with understanding—expanding the mind far beyond its known limits, unlocking access to parts of the brain humanity has forgotten how to use. But the true purpose behind this awakening isn’t peace. A terrifying alien race is coming to Earth—monstrous, calculating, and invisible to most. They don’t just destroy planets… they erase consciousness. And Xeligo, possibly an archangel, has begun quietly building an army of humans with enhanced perception and evolved minds. Through dreams, he trains them. Through memory, he connects them. And when the invasion begins, the only resistance will come from those who were willing to listen while the rest of the world slept.
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Xeligo sounds really unique and exciting, Eusebio De Sales!
I think you're close to a solid logline. I suggest giving the lead character an adjective (the main flaw he has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes his personality).
I also suggest changing "guided by Xeligo, an angelic being" to "guided by an angelic being."
I suggest changing "resist a monstrous alien invasion through evolved consciousness" to "resist a monstrous alien invasion through enhanced perception and evolved minds."
Thanks a lot!! You don’t even know how happy iam because of your comment and rating , i will try to evolve more and more until i get it exelent hope you have an amazing day