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PROXIMAS'DIVINE: THE ALPHA AND THE OMEGA

PROXIMAS'DIVINE: THE ALPHA AND THE OMEGA
By Alex Bridge

GENRE: Science Fiction, Mystery
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When bioengineered imperial scouts encounter the last humans on a ruined Earth, they uncover betrayal within the Empire as their loyalty fractures — just as a secret experiment unleashes Omega, a godlike force beyond control.

TAGLINE: Perfection bows to no one.

SYNOPSIS:

In the distant reaches of space, the Golden Eye Empire of Proxima B dispatches a team of elite Frontier Recon Scouts to a small blue planet, marking the first contact between the advanced empire and this mysterious world. Led by the formidable Commander Azur, the team consists of veteran scout Nire, the powerful Aliat, and the youngest member Sasy. Equipped with cutting-edge nanomachine suits and Andavar weapons, the scouts deploy to the planet's surface, where they discover the ruins of an ancient civilization.

As the reconnaissance mission begins, the team splits up to explore different areas of the desolate world. Aliat uncovers intriguing artifacts and remnants of the planet's former inhabitants, while Nire discovers a diseased rose that she gifts to Azur. Meanwhile, Azur climbs a towering hotel and observes a massive, vitrified crater in the distance. But their investigation takes a dark turn when Sasy's communication is suddenly cut off, and Nire finds evidence of her capture by unknown entities.

Facing a growing threat, the scouts engage in a fierce battle with mutant arachnid creatures possessing radioactive and acidic properties. Using their advanced Andavar weaponry, Azur and Aliat manage to defeat the creatures, but the mission has taken a troubling turn. Returning to their mothership, the scouts meet with Dr. Varis Anda, the creator of the Frontier Recon Scouts program, who uncovers a disturbing connection between the mutant creatures and the planet's deadly acid storms.

Back on the surface, political tensions escalate among the native alpha survivors, with the moderate faction led by Rob and Marcus clashing with the extremist group headed by Etgar and his father Oropo. When the scouts return to the planet to help resolve the crisis, they encounter fierce resistance, and Aliat is gravely injured in an explosion. The situation takes an even darker turn when it's revealed that the twin scouts Gamma and Delta have secret orders from Empress Helat to eliminate Aliat, out of the Empress's jealousy over Aliat's supposed relationship with Emperor Qishi.

Faced with this shocking betrayal, Azur and Nire must make the difficult decision to leave Aliat, Sasy, and the twins behind on the planet as they return to Proxima B to confront the larger conspiracy. Back on the Proxima homeworld, the truth is unveiled – Emperor Qishi has been secretly collaborating with the imprisoned scientist Miyat, and together they have created a powerful artificial being named Omega.

With Omega's dramatic appearance at the exclusive Shining Ball, where she effortlessly kills the Emperor's personal guard, the stage is set for a larger conflict that threatens to shake the very foundations of the Golden Eye Empire, and not only...

Marcos Fizzotti

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Michael Dzurak

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Sijun Cui

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Sijun Cui

Excellent work!

Alex Bridge

Thank you so much Sijun Cui ! The story is quite layered and complex, so I had to leave out many intriguing elements,otherwise there simply wouldn’t have been enough space to fit everything in

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Maurice Vaughan

Really interesting, unique concept, Alex Bridge! I suggest making your logline shorter. I don’t think you need “The interstellar empire of Proxima B is ruled by order, beauty, and technology” in the logline, and I suggest adding the story goal.

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Alex Bridge

: ) thanks! Arthur Charpentier

Vijay Kumar

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Vijay Kumar

Great work

Alex Bridge

many thanks Vijay Kumar ! It took me years to write it.

Abhijeet Aade

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Abhijeet Aade

Hi Alex Bridge,

This sounds like a very expansive sci-fi concept. I like the scale of the world you’re building, especially the idea of bioengineered scouts discovering the last humans on a ruined Earth while political tensions grow within the Empire. The moral conflict within Unit Alpha and the emergence of Omega as a godlike entity create a strong sense of stakes for the larger universe of the story.

The combination of empire politics, advanced technology, and philosophical themes about control and evolution makes it feel like a story with a lot of potential depth. Wishing you the best as you continue developing this project.

Alex Bridge

Hi @Abhijeet, thank you for the thoughtful comment.

The project is actually based on my novel and the real climax of the story arrives at the very end of the book, which in the series structure would essentially become the starting point of Season 2. Of course, many intriguing events and turning points happen before that, gradually building the larger conflict and characters arc.

Themes like the relationship between ethics and science, and the tension between command, duty, and personal feelings are things that deeply fascinate me and that I wanted to explore through this story.

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