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DAYLIGHT SPENDINGS
By Connor N. F. Field

GENRE: Science Fiction, Comedy
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A man wishes for everyday to be Daylight Savings, his wish comes true, but he soon realizes the curse he lifts upon himself when he has to reset his clock every day.

Maurice Vaughan

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Maurice Vaughan

That's a unique concept, Connor N. F. Field! I think your logline needs a better structure. Something like "After a man's wish for every day to be Daylight Savings comes true..."

I suggest giving the man an adjective (the main flaw he has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes his personality). It'll give us more insight into his character. I also suggest changing "man" to his job/career/role.

I suggest adding the man's goal (I'm guessing break the curse) and stakes.

Chase Carmichael

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Chase Carmichael

I agree with Maurice Vaughn on the loglines. However, I just think the premise doesn't really move me. I'm not a fan of anything time-related stories but that's just me. Also, "Changing clocks every day since his wish for daylight savings every day forever" is not a creative thought process. I'm sorry, but it just lacks the desire of what the story is about.

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