SHE WAS NEVER THERE is intriguing, Amir Alawi! “But with every step, he moves further away from everything he once knew” hooked me. And I like the title! It’s catchy, and it matches the story.

Your logline is more of a short synopsis. Here’s a logline template that might help: After/when ______ (the inciting incident/event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (the main flaw the protagonist has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality) _______ (the protagonist’s title/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes).

The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: A _______ (the main flaw the protagonist has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality) _______ (the protagonist’s title/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/event that sets the plot in motion).

Loglines are one or two sentences. A one-sentence logline sounds better, and it takes less time for a producer, director, etc. to read it. Try to keep your logline to 35 words or less. Long loglines can make producers, directors, etc. pass on a project.

Avoid using “must” in loglines. “Must” usually means the protagonist is forced to do whatever they need to do in the story instead of doing it willingly. You might need to use “must” in a logline though, like when the protagonist is forced by another character to do something. Using “must” to choose between two options is fine.

Names in loglines are usually for biopics, well-known stories, and franchises (like Mission: Impossible).

Sometimes I put the location and date that the story takes place in instead of the inciting incident if it’s a Period Piece script.

All stories don’t follow this logline template. Biopics, documentaries, and Experimental scripts might not follow the template. The series logline for a TV show can follow this template, but the pilot logline and episode loglines for the show might not.

Hello Maurice Vaughan,

I hope you're doing well.

Thank you for the suggestions you gave me.

I just wanted to let you know that I’ve written a series with eight episodes, and this episode is part of that series.

I’m aware that a logline should be only one or two sentences, thank you again for the feedback.

But I’m curious:

What’s your opinion on the story, the cover, and the title in general?

You're welcome, Amir Alawi. I'm doing well. Thanks. I hope you are too.

The story is intriguing, unique, and marketable! And I think the audience is going to have fun solving the mystery along with Charlie.

The title is catchy, which will help the producer/production company when they market the movie.

The picture on the cover is AI, so I can't give feedback on that. I don't give feedback on AI pictures, AI synopses, etc.

Hello Maurice Vaughan, thank you for your feedback. The image is not AI-generated, because it doesn't belong to me. It was drawn by an artist on Instagram. I asked him if I could use the image, and he gave me permission.