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THE TREASURE OF THE ESPERANZA
By Marc Serhan

GENRE: Adventure
LOGLINE:

When her husband is dispatched as acting consul to South America, out of boredom, a determined art-appraiser risks her life to uncover the lost treasure of a 16th‑century Portuguese galleon.

SYNOPSIS:

Meg Adams, a mid-30s art appraiser follows her diplomat husband Brian to his new post in a politically unstable South American country—where rumors of rebel uprisings and military crackdowns swirl through the streets. She stumbles upon an undecipherable centuries-old map titled ‘Esperanza’ and soon learns that the ‘Esperanza’ was a 16th-century Portuguese galleon that sank off the coast, carrying riches destined for King Philip II of Spain.

She befriends an ex-British Navy officer, Jeff Stuart, and Joselito, a 12-year-old mute local boy. Out of boredom with her new life, and despite warnings from Brian who is frustrated by her growing obsession, Meg dives headfirst into her treasure hunt, risking her safety and putting a strain on her marriage.

Pursued by Porfirio Diaz, a ruthless landowner, Sharon, his cunning accomplice, cozied up to Captain La Paz, a corrupt military officer, all equally determined to claim the treasure, Meg and Jeff must overcome various obstacles in their quest.

As they forge on to win the race the hunt has become, they accidentally stumble into a group of rebels lead by a bullet-wounded Serrano whom they help escape.

In a climactic confrontation, Meg and Jeff discover the treasure hidden deep beneath the water, but they are ambushed by Porfirio’s gang. Serrano and his rebels come close to rescue them, but it’s Joselito’s quick thinking and bravery that saves them from certain death. The ordeal ends with an explosion that shatters Porfirio’s boat and sends the treasure back into the abyss.

Meg, Jeff and Joselito emerge victorious. Rich with nothing but scraps of the treasure, they are left contemplating possibilities…

THE TREASURE OF THE ESPERANZA

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Maurice Vaughan

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Maurice Vaughan

Sounds like an exciting, epic Adventure movie, @Marc! I think your logline just needs the stakes (what happens if she doesn't uncover the lost treasure or "risking her safety and putting a strain on her marriage").

Marc Serhan

Thanks for the comment, Maurice. You always come up with the right thing to say. Love that! In this story, there is no saving the world from evil. She is dead bored in her new life, so if she gives up, she will die of boredom. You inspired me to add that bit to the synopsis. It's a fun piece and she is likeable (I think).

Maurice Vaughan

You're welcome, @Marc. "In this story, there is no saving the world from evil." Ok, I see. I think "risking her safety and putting a strain on her marriage" would enhance your logline then. It's personal stakes. And dying of boredom is another stake, but I think that's better in the synopsis like you did than the logline.

"When her husband is dispatched as acting consul to South America, out of boredom, a determined art-appraiser braves a gauntlet of deadly challenges to uncover the lost treasure of a 16th‑century Portuguese galleon, risking her safety and putting a strain on her marriage."

Marc Serhan

Convinced! Thank you, Maurice.

Maurice Vaughan

You're welcome, @Marc. I'm really excited to watch this!

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Jordan Baines

I'd love to see this made.

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