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THE WRITERS
By Tom Schaefer
After a chance accident, a struggling writer, Mitch Snyder, gains the ability to see beings known as The Writers—entities who observe and influence human lives. Determined to understand their true purpose, Mitch embarks on a journey that blurs the line between observer and participant in his own story, challenging notions of fate, destiny, and personal control.
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"THE WRITERS" is a premium supernatural drama series that combines high-concept storytelling with universal themes of personal empowerment. The series follows Mitch Snyder, a former literary prodigy who discovers a hidden world of supernatural beings called Writers who chronicle human existence. When he learns some Writers have gone rogue, attempting to edit humanity's destiny, Mitch must prevent them from rewriting our future while discovering that true power lies not in observing stories, but in writing our own.
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Unique concept, Tom Schaefer! I don't think you need "only to realize that true power lies in writing his own story" in the logline. I think the rest of your logline is intriguing enough to get script requests. Maybe save "only to realize that true power lies in writing his own story" for the synopsis and pitch.
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Thank you Maurice! However - the very element you want deleted is the key ingredient in the series. This writer, imagine Jeff Bridges as the lead.
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And now, after seeing that I grabbed and posted the wrong logline and synopsis! DOH!
I now have the original logline and synopsis up. I was experimenting with amping up the series into a more epic proportions with an other-dimension civil war that our lead character winds up in.
You're welcome, @Tom. I see your point about "only to realize that true power lies in writing his own story."
I think your logline could be tightened up. It's 57 words. Here’s a logline template that might help: After/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (the main flaw that the protagonist has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality) _______ (the protagonist’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes).
The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: A _______ (the main flaw that the protagonist has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality) _______ (the protagonist’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion).
Loglines are one or two sentences. A one-sentence logline sounds better, and it takes less time for a producer, director, etc. to read it. Try to keep your logline to 35 words or less.
Avoid using “must” in loglines. “Must” usually means the protagonist is forced to do whatever they need to do in the story instead of doing it willingly. You might need to use “must” in a logline though, like when the protagonist is forced by another character to do something.
Names in loglines are usually for biopics, well-known stories, and franchises (like Mission: Impossible).
Sometimes I put the location and date that the story takes place in instead of the inciting incident if it’s a Period Piece script.
All stories don’t follow this logline template. Biopics, documentaries, and Experimental scripts might not follow the template. The series logline for a TV show can follow this template, but the pilot logline and episode loglines for the show might not.
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