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THE PEBBLE CHAMPION

THE PEBBLE CHAMPION
By Alan Pritchard

GENRE: Drama
LOGLINE:

After his mother’s tragic death, 15-year-old Chris moves to a small island to live with his estranged father. There, an imaginary pebble-skimming competition and an unexpected friendship with carefree Thane help him confront his grief, explore his sexuality, and discover his true place in the world.

SYNOPSIS:

After the tragic death of his mother, 15-year-old Chris finds himself uprooted from his life in London and sent to live with his estranged father, Marmaduke, on the Isle of Wight—a place he has never considered home. Marmaduke is an eccentric artist whose attempts at reconnecting with Chris are awkward at best, leaving both father and son struggling to bridge the emotional distance between them. For Chris, the unfamiliar setting—an island surrounded by sea and silence—only deepens the isolation he feels following his mother’s loss.

In this new environment, Chris must navigate the turmoil of grief, loneliness, and the confusing emotions that arise from being thrust into the care of a father he barely knows. Chris’s life changes when he meets Thane, a carefree classmate whose infectious joy contrasts sharply with Chris's sadness. Thane’s spirit provides Chris with a surprising source of comfort, and together, they form an unlikely friendship that becomes a lifeline for Chris as he tries to make sense of his new reality.

A seemingly simple pastime—an imaginary pebble-skimming competition—becomes an unexpected avenue for Chris to express his grief. Skimming pebbles across the sea becomes a ritual of healing, a way to let go of the pain he holds inside. The repetitive, almost meditative nature of the game allows Chris to find moments of calm amidst the chaos of his emotions. Through this simple pastime, Chris begins to confront his buried feelings of anger, sadness, guilt and confusion over his mother’s death.

As Chris grows closer to Thane, he also starts to grapple with his emerging sexuality. Thane’s carefree nature and openness help Chris feel accepted for who he is, allowing him to explore a part of himself that he has never been able to articulate. This exploration of identity is both exhilarating and terrifying for Chris, but Thane’s unwavering friendship provides the safety he needs to take the first steps toward understanding himself.

Meanwhile, Chris’s relationship with Marmaduke remains strained but gradually begins to shift. Marmaduke, though clumsy in his attempts to connect, genuinely cares for Chris and makes efforts to be present in his life. Through shared experiences—whether it’s struggling through awkward dinners, talking about his mother, or walking along the coast—father and son slowly begin to bridge the gap between them. Marmaduke’s patience and sincerity eventually create space for Chris to open up, and together, they begin the difficult process of rebuilding their fractured relationship.

As the story unfolds, Chris’s journey is one of profound transformation. From a boy overwhelmed by loss and disconnected from those around him, Chris learns to find solace in simple moments—skimming pebbles, laughing with Thane, and finally, opening up to his father. He discovers that healing does not come all at once but in small, quiet steps. By the end, Chris has not only found a place for himself on the island but has also begun to redefine his place in the world, embracing both the pain of his past and the possibilities of his future.

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Maurice Vaughan

THE PEBBLE CHAMPION sounds interesting, Alan Pritchard! I’ve never seen a movie about pebble-skimming/a pebble-skimming competition. Great job expressing the characters, Chris’ journey, the struggles, and the plot in the synopsis!

I think your logline could be tightened up. Here’s a logline template that might help: After/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (the main flaw that the protagonist has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality) _______ (the protagonist’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes).

The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: A _______ (the main flaw that the protagonist has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality) _______ (the protagonist’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion).

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