Banafsheh Esmailzadeh, the use of “entrepreneuse” is unusual. While technically correct, it may feel outdated or distract from the otherwise modern tone. Consider simplifying to “entrepreneur” to keep the focus on the story. The ending hint, “more interested in her” is compelling, but could be slightly clearer to make the romantic tension or identity shift more explicit. A small tweak in phrasing could help elevate the stakes and clarify the tone, whether this leans more toward drama, comedy, or romantic dramedy. Overall, a bold and original concept that just needs a touch more clarity to land fully.

Thank you Ashley Renee Smith, I'll keep it in mind :)