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LUCY JONES
By Roberto Nylund
A hard-boiled, intrepid young cat relies on her nimbleness, powers of deduction, and a colorful cast of neighborhood characters to solve mysteries that threaten her human family's wellbeing.
SYNOPSIS:
Pilot Synopsis: The Case of the Blown Out Bike
Lucy Jones' human family loves their Sunday bike ride. But when a brand new inner tube won't hold air, she suspects foul play. Are mischievous raccoons playing a prank or any of a dozen possible pets of interest involved? Lucy Jones follows clues to lay a trap she can spring when the entire neighborhood is invited to a gathering.
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This is unique, Roberto Nylund! Great job on the logline, but I don't see how the cat and neighborhood characters solving mysteries helps the threatened family. I think you just need to show that connection. Other than that, solid logline.
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Thanks Maurice Vaughan, I appreciate the helpful feedback, good idea to clarify the stakes.
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You're welcome, Roberto Nylund.
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