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Deborah Ikina
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CAMILA
By Deborah Ikina

GENRE: Drama, Thriller

LOGLINE: Camila "When 15-year-old Camila leaves Chicago for New York to live with her mom, she's eager for a fresh start at Bird High School. But her new life quickly turns into a nightmare when she falls for Maison, the charming and popular guy who just happens to be Lilian's possessive boyfriend. As Camila navigates this treacherous love triangle, she must confront the dark secrets and lies that threaten to destroy her relationships, reputation, and even her own sense of self."

SYNOPSIS:

CAMILA is the main character, she was transferred to Bird high school where she accounted her worst enemy " Lillian" who turns Camila's life to a nightmare and made her arrested, Camila eventually came out of prison but her night mare are not over yet

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- Marcos Fizzotti
- Deborah Ikina
10 months ago

This sounds like an interesting Drama story, Deborah Ikina.

I think your logline needs some work. Here’s a logline template that might help:

After/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (the main flaw that the main character has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the main character’s personality) _______ (the main character’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes).

The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: A _______ (the main flaw that the main character has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the main character’s personality) _______ (the main character’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion).

Avoid using names in a logline (unless it’s a Biopic, a well-known story, or a franchise like Mission: Impossible).

Deborah Ikina