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Astronaut Brie Foley battles time, trauma, and transformation after being abducted by Space Harvesters for “agricultural purposes.”
Comps: The Wicker Man meets The Fly
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TUSK is about a woman who cannot die, having been forever transformed by a fateful encounter with alien hospitality.
A bright and restless child, Brie Foley shows early talents for farming and an obsessive fascination with the night sky. A farm kid living an isolated life with her pious grandparents, she struggles to cope with the limitations of small-town life. In her teens, a terrible accident and an encounter with a troubled young man set her on the road to an ominous destiny.
The young man Brie meets in Survival Camp has cosmic knowledge and carries secrets. When he tries to dissuade her from her path, it is to spare her life and perhaps redeem his own.
Brie’s capture by alien entities challenges not only her scientific beliefs, but spiritual ones. The creature that tends to her during her "pasturing" - a haunted, tragic figure who has also suffered on Earth and in space - is her only beacon of hope and mercy. Triggered memories and visions Brie experiences while trying to escape reveal a pattern of recurring symbols from throughout her life, perhaps foreshadowing her fate. And a "ticking clock" element threatens as Brie's body slowly mutates and her hope of rescue comes to a brutal climax.
There are no elephants in space. TUSK means something else in this part of the cosmos; something rare and expensive for those who want it, and something terrifying to those employed in its manufacture.
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Stephanie.."Love this..very interesting "! You're very talented..I can sense your timing and beats..draws you in. Don't change a thing!! Oh..and listen to everyone's opinion and then continue being you! ie.."Silent Fuck Off Face"!
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Daniel Perry Fuentes, thanks for the enthusiastic AND funny comment! My apologies for not seeing your rating and comment until tonight. I took a fantastic workshop that provided a One Sheet/Elevator Pitch formula to follow, but two pieces of advice greatly helped in paring down the key elements of the script. 1) Producers have to plow through PILES of pitches, hoping to find the proverbial "needle in the haystack." Rambling pisses them off, as does giving away too many reveals. Pique their curiosity with fundamental details and convey the TONE of the work. Identify the protagonist, key secondary characters, problem, challenges, and possible consequences, then close, offering to send the script if they're interested. And 2) The summary, if properly written, will instruct the reader HOW to read the script. It should do the emotional "heavy lifting" and provide a contextual framework for their evaluation of the material. I got 4's and 5's on my Scorecard from a producer I recently pitched TUSK to, compliments on the pitch, AND a script request, so I can confirm that the formula works! I appreciate anyone kind enough to check out my pitch; it won't be for everybody. But, my "FOF" will surface if comments are mean-spirited; in that case, all bets are off! :D