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LEYTE GULF
By Jason Sacchi
The Americans prepare for their largest naval battle against the Imperial Japanese Fleet at Leyte Gulf.
SYNOPSIS:
Taffy 3 prepare for their largest naval battle in history at Leyte Gulf against the Imperial Japanese Center Force, while the rest of the American Naval Fleet went after the last Japanese Carrier that attacked on Pearl Harbor three years earlier.
LEYTE GULF
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Jason, the logline is solid but doesn't tell us anything. What's the theme? What is the human element? Whose story does this battle revolve around? A person? A group of sailors? An ensemble POV from both sides, like the movie We Were Soldiers? What's the trauma, anxiety, and despair behind this preparation for war? Tell us something we can grab onto, tug at our heartstrings sort of way. Is it a pseudo-documentary-style animation? A comedy ala Pixar-style? Keep up the great writing, my friend!
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