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SAVED BY ANDROMEDA
By Göran Johansson
A grieving female CIA operative must break out of a toxic relationship to avoid a lifetime in jail, but to do so she needs to be sober enough to use advice from another galaxy.
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CIA agent Pauline Cooper drinks too much, due to the loss of her baby. At the same time, Pauline's ruthless uncle is her superior, who wants her to assassinate a powerful figure. So everything is about to change to the worse. But hope arrives in the form of a scientist. Because Pauline has a chance to alter the course of her life when she accidentally witnesses the unplanned teleportation of a person to a planet in the Andromeda Galaxy. Later, a fateful decision forces Pauline to confront her inner turmoil, transforming her so she can show what redemption means.
SAVED BY ANDROMEDA
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Göran Johansson your logline has some fascinating elements, spy intrigue, personal stakes, and a sci-fi twist with “interstellar advice,” but the concept currently feels a bit unclear. The protagonist’s internal struggles (grief, addiction, toxic relationship) are compelling on their own, but it’s not fully clear how “interstellar advice” fits into the story’s world. Is this a grounded spy thriller with a sci-fi edge, or is it more surreal or speculative? Clarifying the tone and how the sci-fi element operates will help the reader connect with the story more effectively. Strengthening the logic of her escape and the consequences if she fails could also raise the tension.
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Dear Ashley, thank you very much for your comments. I wish I had discovered earlier that you spent time on me. I plan to revise soon, using your comment.
And thanks to you to Tasha.
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And thanks to you to Abdusamad. You must have rated my logline at the same time that I wrote my earlier comment since I didn't see you. And now my logline has been changed.