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Surviving in a post-apocalyptic world alien to him, a teenage human male must complete his test in order to graduate from a Vigilante Clan called The Knighthood, with all odds against him internally and externally.
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Knighthood: Knights of the Capital follows the story of teenage human male named Justin Adams, trying to graduate from a Vigilante Order called "The Knighthood," while adapting to an unfamiliar post apocalyptic world set in the future, where he is the only human, and the world viewing him as alien similarly as much as he views the world. During his trial, his relationship to his closest allies and his abilities are put to the test, his views of the world, morality and loyalty are questioned, encountering new enemies, threats and rivals around every corner.
Luckily, he has some important allies to aid him, his brotherly figure and fellow member, David Zelly, his master who he has a complicated relationship with, Sarah Linzel, along with her butler, and her Grandfather, a deity who guides him, named Shirley the Dragon Queen, and two unfortunate tag-alongs, two siblings named Savannah and Charles Hutchingson.
While trying to pass his test, Justin Adams will discover that there is something far more sinister, than what he is expecting.
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Marcos Fizzotti thank you Marcos!
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Almost solid logline, Justin Groats. We know the protagonist is a male from “Surviving in a post-apocalyptic world alien to him,” so I suggest taking out “male” in “teenage human male.”
There’s an extra space before “a teenage human male.”
I also suggest giving him an adjective (the main flaw he has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes his personality). It’ll give the reader more insight into his character.
I think “with all odds against him internally and externally” could be worded better. Maybe “with all odds against him from inside and outside the clan.”
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