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THANKSGIVING DAY
By Kehinde Akanbi

GENRE: Thriller / Suspense
LOGLINE: Years after serving time in prison for murdering two state troopers, a disgraced, resentful ex-convict is released from prison and will now stop at nothing to bring down the family of the exceptionally adept but shady lawyer who falsified evidence against him.
Matthew Parvin

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Matthew Parvin

Good idea; just need to streamline the verbage. Less adjectives. Hope this helps!

Maurice Vaughan

This sounds like it’s gonna be fun to watch, Kehinde Akanbi.

I think your logline could be tightened up some. Here’s a logline suggestion: “After serving time for murdering two state troopers, a resentful ex-convict stops at nothing to bring down the family of the exceptionally adept lawyer who falsified evidence against him.”

I suggest only using one adjective for the ex-convict. The same thing for the lawyer. I think you can take out "shady" because we know from "who falsified evidence against him" that the lawyer is shady.

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