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Bill McCormick
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LEGENDS PARALLEL
By Bill McCormick

GENRE: Sci-fi, Action

LOGLINE:

When a billionaire genius discovers the multiverse is real, he dons a high-tech suit and becomes Siafu — a superhero in one universe and a target in all the others. But as powerful enemies, deadly metas, and godlike crime lords emerge across five Earths, the real fight isn't over justice — it's over who controls the timeline before reality tears itself apart.

SYNOPSIS:

Tom Hill has it all: unlimited wealth, global fame, a Nobel Peace Prize… and a suit that turns him into a goddamn super-soldier. But when his multiverse research uncovers parallel Earths — each with its own history, power structure, and dirty secrets — his private war against corruption becomes a cosmic free-for-all.

From sex-powered crime queens to drug-dealing dimension-hoppers, from flying assassins to deadly familial truths, Legends Parallel is a no-holds-barred sci-fi saga where every Earth has a price, and every hero has a secret. This isn’t your grandfather’s comic book. Unless he’s the one wearing the armor and blowing up mob bosses.

The multiverse in this story is based on the computations done by Hugh Everett, III which posit that the multiverse began at the big bang and there are no mirror images of any individuals.

LEGENDS PARALLEL

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- Marcos Fizzotti
1 year ago

I like the title and mashup picture, Bill McCormick. I think your logline needs more info (like who the main character is, who they have to save the multiverse from, and what happens if they don't save the multiverse). Here’s a logline template that might help:

“After/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ _______ (an adjective that describes the main character’s personality and the main character’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/participates/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) so/in order to ________ (stakes).”

The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: “A _______ _______ (an adjective that describes the main character’s personality and the main character’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/participates/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion).”

And Christopher Lockhart has a great webinar on loglines. It’s called “How To Make Your Logline Attractive to A-List Actors, Producers, Directors, Managers, Agents, Financiers and Development Execs” (www.stage32.com/webinars/How-To-Make-Your-Logline-Attractive-to-A-List-A...).