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A dangerous stalker finds work at a Haunted House attraction
SYNOPSIS:
THERE’S A REAL MONSTER IN THE HOUSE
A group of people are planning to open a scare attraction for Halloween, led by Riley Connor and his girlfriend Lois Bennett whose mother Glenda Bennett is funding the place. While contending with the retiring watchman Larry Dellard, the attraction gains a new employee in the form of Quinton “Quin” Hadley, who is more than happy to help them.
Overtime as the haunt proves successful, Quin secretly starts to show a darker side to himself to the point of living in the attraction and begins sabotaging some of Riley’s works and soon starts taking an interest in Lois and attempts to break them up secretly, even going as far as making it look like Riley was interested in another girl but fails. Quin breaks into the Bennett’s house and goes through Lois’s things but leaves before they get home.
Quin attempts to kill Riley but fails, and then decides to frame Riley for cheating on Lois, and while it seems to work Glenda meets Larry who claims Quin tried to kill him and did a background check which reveals Quin a criminal background, suspicious she does some background checking and learns he went to prison for stalking young women and attempting to rape a couple, and to make it worst he killed the boyfriend of a women he was interested in.
Realizing that he was given the job on a false application and that he was hired through a work-related program that a psychologist who was more of a quack pulled strings to put him in Glenda fires him and lets Riley and Lois know what happed and they suspect Quin was stalking them.
Glenda asks Police Captain James Terry to have some officers do some investigation to help make her and her employees feel better from the ordeal. They discover that Quin had been killing anyone who threatened to expose him, and that night Quin attempts to kidnap Lois during the final haunt during Halloween in an attempt to rape and kill her but Riley arrives in time and the two fight. Lois shoots Quin but he isn’t killed and tries to kill her, but Riley continues to confront him until he is shot by the police officers.
The attraction was a success despite the ordeal and Riley and Quin get back together.
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I like it! I feel the logline needs a little bit more info though, like does he have a specific target who's also working there for example?
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