Hello fellow creatives, I would love some feedback about this logline.

Thanks,

F.J

This sounds thrilling and suspenseful, Fahad Joyfield! I think your logline could be tightened up. Here’s a logline suggestion. I tried to make it one sentence, but I couldn’t without losing important parts of the story.

After taking refuge in a secure estate during a global pandemic, a mother and daughter uncover a hidden underground lab where a toxic gas is driving inhabitants to madness. With armed guards closing in and the toxic effects claiming lives, they fight to escape and expose the dark experiment.

Thank you so much Maurice Vaughan

You're welcome, Fahad Joyfield.