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In 1990, after he blows his NYU audition, a gay teen must learn to embrace vulnerability and accept help from others if he wants to escape the swamps of Florida and avoid becoming just like his lost and lonely mother - stuck in Florida forever.
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Sounds interesting, Peter Petralia.
I think the logline needs some work. One reason is it’s long (42 words).
Here’s a logline suggestion: “After blowing his NYU audition, a gay teen in 1990 must learn to embrace vulnerability and accept help if he wants to escape the swamps of Florida and avoid becoming just like his lost and lonely mother.”
I removed “stuck in Florida forever” because you already wrote “wants to escape the swamps of Florida.”
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