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HITTAH
By Tyrone Harge
In a future where bullets write laws and graves pave the streets, a ruthless hustler rises from nothing, stacking bodies and breaking kings to build an empire — or die nameless under neon skies.
SYNOPSIS:
After years of killing for corporate kings, Marcus "Hittah" Williamson is done taking orders.
In a world ruled by bullets and betrayal, he builds JUICE—Judged Under Iron, Conflict, and Empire—a ballistic dynasty born from blood, broken promises, and pure survival.
Now Hittah isn't fighting for scraps.
He's taking the whole damn throne—or dying in the streets that made him.
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Catchy title and interesting concept, Tyrone Harge. I think your logline would be stronger if you change "Marcus "Ju1ce" Williamson" to "a _______ (the main flaw he has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes his personality)." Names in loglines are usually for biopics, well-known stories, and franchises like Mission: Impossible. Marcus' nickname is interesting though.
I also think your logline would be stronger if you explain "carves an empire with neon, blood, and bullets" more and add the stakes.
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Hey Maurice Vaughan. Thank you so much. I am going to give a clearer and more powerful logline from your feedback. I appreciate you!
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You're welcome, Tyrone Harge. Your logline is better, and it has that Crime Drama feel to it.
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