This one is a tough call for me because I was advised to make the logline about the "main character" despite the fact that in my mind this is an ensemble show. Any advice for changing it for the better?

How about this logline Kenneth Michael Daniels

When an ambitious home brewer pursues his dream of opening a craft brewery, he must navigate a minefield of challenges: a controlling investor, a visionary but costly partner, a girlfriend with diverging ambitions, and his own battle-scarred ego, all threatening to ferment chaos in his pursuit of entrepreneurial glory.