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SANDS OF LANIKAI
By Greg Blair
Before the bombs drop on Pearl Harbor, a young man new to Hawaii falls in love with an island girl as he seeks answers to the sudden, cryptic death of his grandfather.
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Set against the backdrop of Windward O'ahu in the days before and after the attack on Pearl Harbor, Sands of Lanikai is a story of espionage and romance wrapped around historical times and personalities.
This coming-of-age saga follows a young man, PAUL SANDS who seeks answers to a sudden family tragedy. His personal journey travels down a road of love, intrigue, suspense and confrontation as it paints a vivid picture of rustic Lanikai and Kailua, Hawai'i.
SANDS OF LANIKAI
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Greg Blair, your logline establishes a compelling time and place which immediately adds historical weight and looming tension. The emotional core is clear: a young man navigating grief while falling in love in a paradise on the brink of devastation. The combination of mystery, romance, and historical drama gives the story solid potential.
To strengthen the logline, consider adding more specificity about the stakes or the mystery behind the grandfather’s death. Is it suspicious? Is the investigation putting the protagonist in danger? Adding a hint of conflict or urgency could deepen the intrigue and emotional tension. As it stands, the premise is atmospheric and heartfelt, but a bit more detail would help distinguish it from other romantic period dramas and make it more immediately engaging.
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