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WE ALWAYS FIGHT
By Madeline Gos Goshorn
Michelle and Alex are a couple that can’t have a conversation without arguing, but their relationship is put to the test when they stumble into a repetitive death cycle on their way home from a road trip. They'll either put aside their issues to escape or kill each other over them.
WE ALWAYS FIGHT
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I'm intrigued by this logline. It would help to give us an idea of their flaws and what the story goal is as well.
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This sounds interesting, Madeline Gos Goshorn. I like the "dysfunctional couple stuck in a time loop" angle.
I suggest taking the questions out of your logline. I think it'd be better to put them in your pitch than the logline.
Here's a logline suggestion: On a long road trip back home, a dysfunctional couple tries to escape a repetitive death cycle at the Interval Hotel without tearing each other apart.
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Maurice Vaughan Thanks for the suggestion! I'll play around with it some more
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You're welcome, Madeline Gos Goshorn. And I like the title!
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Anthony McBride what do you think of the updated version?
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Hi, Madeline Gos Goshorn. Your updated logline is better. I was going to give notes on it the way I give notes to other writers on their loglines, but I looked at your profile and saw you have your own production company, so I'm guessing you're going to make We Always Fight. You can really do what you want with the logline then. :) I think a tighter logline will help you attract investors and market your film though.
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The Premise is amazing Madeline Gos Goshorn
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Madeline Gos Goshorn, the contrast between their relationship struggles and the supernatural stakes creates compelling tension, and there’s a hint of dark humor that could really shine if intentional. That said, the phrasing could be tightened a bit to make the logline more concise and impactful. The term “repetitive death cycle” is intriguing, but a touch vague. Clarifying whether it’s a time loop, supernatural curse, or sci-fi phenomenon could help orient the reader. Additionally, the phrase “kill each other over them” feels a little casual depending on the intended tone. If the story leans into dark comedy, it fits, but if it’s meant to be a more serious thriller or drama, you might consider rephrasing.
Ashley Renee Smith Thanks so much for the notes. The script has a sprinkle of comedy for sure, a lot of relatable couple arguments mixed in with the horror.